I Only Have a Moment.
In this moment, I feel
the hum of a voice
coming over the
airport speaker,
the passing of a car
engine finding some
other destination,
the distance of a raindrop
pining for a windowpane, all
on a balmy Tuesday morning.
I only have a moment more to
explain the reason I have
for loving you—once I took
you into my sheltered heart,
deep inside the core of my soul,
embedded into the marrow of my bones,
released into the exhale of my breath.
There I felt the expansive
mission of a snowflake,
the trilogy of a scar,
the rummaging of a
tattered belted heart, all
lost to cryptic tunnels
of the obscure past.
I only have a moment to explain
the reasons for leaving you…
mission of a snowflake,
ReplyDeletethe trilogy of a scar,
the rummaging of a
tattered belted heart, all
lost to cryptic tunnels
of the obscure past.....love how you describe the feeling in that....and what a quick turn in the end as well to reasons for leaving...really cool approach in your piece....from the rain to the relationship, to snow and leaving....nice
"There I felt the expansive
ReplyDeletemission of a snowflake"
LOVED this part. What a beautiful poem.
Thank you so much for the comment
ReplyDeleteI love this! Great piece :)
ReplyDeleteoh heck..i didn't expect the turn in the end.. maybe sometimes love makes us so vulnerable that there's no way we can go on at a certain point..
ReplyDeleteYet there was still a goodbye at the airport -- maybe coming back?
ReplyDeleteDoesn't sound permanent.
3 scars maybe weren't enough.
No strong message given to the lover.
I actually wondered, "Is this goodbye?"
Wow, that ending took me by surprise....but then again, that is what good poetry does!
ReplyDeleteoh dear, that hurts somehow... but i love your poem, so beautifully written
ReplyDeleteTunnels of the past hold many minotaurs, but the beauty of a moment is its passing and the infinite moments to come
ReplyDeleteThis was masterful,
ReplyDelete"There I felt the expansive
mission of a snowflake,
the trilogy of a scar,
the rummaging of a
tattered belted heart, all
lost to cryptic tunnels
of the obscure past."
And then the turn at the end, a real kick. Didn't see it coming.
A strong, resonant poem.- Mosk
Very clever and well written transitions. Rain to snow, love to leaving. Excellente! Enjoyed the voice. It reads very good out loud.
ReplyDeleteTracy, this was heartbreaking. I didn't see that ending coming either, nice sounds in this as well.
ReplyDeletePamela
This one got to me in a subtle way where sadness arrived in an unidentifiable form. A very effective poem.
ReplyDeleteI think there was something in first set of lines that foreshadowed the ending, but still you drew me in so sweetly with your reasons for loving; it was really beautiful.
ReplyDeleteI could feel the end coming and could tell it was a tough journey but you handled it grandly..excellent poem, if sad ;)
ReplyDeleteThe images go straight to the heart. Exquisite work.
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ReplyDeleteIn this moment, I deeply feel this. Thank you.
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